The Dark Woods
Once upon a time in a far away land, a young boy was wondering the woods looking for his lost chicken. He had followed a small animal trail until, he arrived in a small meadow. He had found a few feathers along the trail but, nothing that would hint towards the identity of the predator, or whatever took his prize bird. In any other circumstance he would never risk going into the dark woods in search for a single animal, but this was his prize chicken. The one bird that he had worked the hardest with and that showed the most potential to be a show bird.
Eventually the young boy came across, a mysterious scorch mark in the far end of the meadow. He pondered what in the world could have made such a ferocious burn in the middle of the woods. He had no idea, for you see the dark woods had not yet been explored. Everyone wondered what could be found amongst the trees in the deepest depths of the woodland. The boy walked past the mysterious mark in the earth, until he found where the trail he had found continued.
He had followed this until he came across a moss covered opening in the side of a hill. He peered inside to see what he could find, because he had found a small feather from his chicken at the opening of the cave. "Anyone home", he called. He was only answered with a low rumble, almost to crude to be an animal or person. "Hello?" he beckoned into the deepest part of the cave. Yet again he was only answered with a low rumbling sound, but this time he could make out a word and only one "leave," in a low grumpy response.
The boy responded, " I lost my prize bird, I was wondering if it somehow made its way here to this cave?". The low grumble of a voice responded, "take it, and leave". He heard a loud metallic clank, and his prize chicken squawk. The boy scooped up his prize bird and left the cave never to return, wondering what the being was that he had just encountered.
Nice story was shocking to see what would happen
ReplyDeleteGreat job, so suspenseful!
ReplyDeleteWish it explained a little but more about the woods but very good story
ReplyDeleteLove the setting in which this takes place
ReplyDeleteVery suspenseful great job
ReplyDeleteOhhhh the suspense
ReplyDeleteGood vocabulary
ReplyDeleteGreat story, very suspensful
ReplyDeleteGood story
ReplyDeleteReally cool concept, I've never heard anything like it!
ReplyDeleteVery suspenseful
ReplyDeleteGood story? I loved the suspense!!!
ReplyDeleteThis story Is beautiful but kinda scary
ReplyDeleteVery well put together. Love the words used.
ReplyDeleteGreat story.
ReplyDeleteSuspenful
ReplyDeleteI like the suspense
ReplyDeleteGreat story
ReplyDeleteNice story! very suspenseful and scary
ReplyDeleteMysterious and suspenseful very well done
ReplyDeleteNice Plot!
ReplyDeleteSuspenseful!
ReplyDeleteGreat story
ReplyDeleteI peed my pants while reading this because of the suspense. Better than most horror movies now a days
ReplyDeleteSuspenseful
ReplyDeleteWho is in the cave?
ReplyDeleteMysterious, suspenseful, and it has a chicken.
ReplyDeleteA chicken man.
That's the best story I could ask for, good job.
Very mysterious
ReplyDeleteI like the idea and how it left us wondering what he encountered
ReplyDeleteMysterious
ReplyDeleteNice cliff hanger. "Bats are the chicken of the cave
ReplyDeletenice mystery stuff
ReplyDeleteI thought I had commented on this one! It definitely made me laugh when I first read it. Very well described and makes you feel the suspense, though I really do NOT want to know what was going on in that cave. The chicken reminds me of a Roy D. Mercer prank call with a prized chicken. Maybe some day I'll play it for you guys in class. Good job. :)
ReplyDeleteGreat story
ReplyDeleteGotta save your prized chicken, great story. I wish I knew what was in the cave though.
ReplyDeleteThe prize chicken is everything, nice job
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