Tuesday, October 20, 2015

Story #19: The Haunted House

The Haunted House
   It was a silent, foggy night. The moon was shining through the clouds. The moon was so bright that could see everything. A group of teenage girls were on there way to go to a haunted house. Their names were Judy, Holly, and Ashley. This was said to be the scariest haunted house around. The girls thought that they could go through it with absolutely no problem at all but others thought differently. Their parents had told them not to go, but they decided to either way.
   There it was, the scariest haunted house around. The girls were starting to over think what they had said once they bought their tickets. They could hear the people ahead of them screaming louder than ever. They decided to turn around and go home but they couldn't because once you buy your ticket, there's no getting out of it. They had to go through in order to leave.
   "What have we gotten ourselves into?" Holly whimpered.
  "We should have never have even said we were brave enough to do this," Judy replied.
   "Let's make a run for it!" Ashley whispered
The three girls started running but they got caught. They were told they couldn't leave and were lead into the haunted house.
  They were finally inside of the haunted house. They could see absolutely nothing, but then all of a sudden a light flashes and there is a creepy looking man standing right in front of them.
   "Aahhhh!" all the girls screamed together.
   They ran with fear but couldn't find a way out. They pounded on every wall, but nothing would move! All of a sudden they hear a voice.
  "Come over here little girls!" creepily whispered a voice coming from the corner.
  The girls started crying, but slowly walked towards a voice because they knew it was the only way out. The voice led them through a secret door that only opened when you were told to come towards it. The girls got through the door, but suddenly they got stopped again. They could hear breathing, but couldn't see anything at all. All they could do was stand there and wait.....

30 comments:

  1. Good story, very detailed

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  2. Great description

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  3. Good story and very detailed

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  4. Such detail and description very nicely done

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  5. Good story very descriptive

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  6. Very descriptive, making it interesting

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  7. Really detailed and creepy

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  8. What happened after?? Scary story

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  9. They words used were very fitting to the story.

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  10. Suspenseful! Left me hangin

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  11. Excellent dialogue and suspense at the end.

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  12. The suspense is killing me... Get it it's a pun... I'm done

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  13. Wait...how is it both foggy and clear? ;)

    These endings are killing me, too!!!

    You have to tell us what happens!

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  14. Spooky, but I would love to know what happens to them :)

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  15. Good story, little spooky

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