Monsters
In The Closet
I hear these noises coming from my
closet. I know there is something in there but my parents always check and say
there is nothing. I sleep with a light on and under the covers because I feel
like something is going to come after me.
It was only me and my bigger sister
home for the night. I sleep with her because my parents wouldn't be right next
door. We were getting ready to go to bed and I kept hearing these noises but I
didn't know where they were coming form.
"Do
you hear those noises?" I asked.
"I
think you're just hearing things, there is nothing out there!" exclaimed
Lynn.
I just ignored the noises and kept
my eyes closed but I couldn't fall alseep. I heard the noises for about 4
hours. I finally got up to get a drink but when I turned the light on I saw
something run threw the hallway. We don't have any pets so I knew it couldn't
be that. I ran straight back to bed.
"Lynn!
Lynn! Lynn! Wake up there is something in the house!" I yelled
"Go
back to bed you're just imagining things!" Lynn shouted.
Again, I couldn't sleep so I just
layed there. I finally decided to get back up and go look. I turned every light
on as I walked into a new room. I didn't see anything till I got into my room.
My closet door randomly shut. I opened the door and turned the light on. I
moved the clothes around and until I saw something closer to the back. It was
like a little light tunnel. I put my hand into and then...
So suspenseful! Great job!
ReplyDeleteI want to know what happens!!! Good job on the suspense
ReplyDeleteReally funny (like a scary funny).
ReplyDeleteSame
DeleteWhat happens?!?! Nice story
ReplyDeleteSequel?
ReplyDeleteVery suspenseful I enjoyed reading great job
ReplyDeleteGood suspense
ReplyDeleteMan you left me hanging 😩 Good description and plot!
ReplyDeleteVery good
ReplyDeleteGood job
ReplyDeleteGood story, very suspenseful.
ReplyDeleteThis is how Narnia starts 🍜💧😬💧
ReplyDeleteVery suspenseful. Well done!
ReplyDeleteGreat story
ReplyDeleteGood story!
ReplyDeleteI want to know what happens!
ReplyDeleteSuspense and very frustrating ending
ReplyDeleteCliffhanger!!!
ReplyDeleteThen wat happened? Amazing story!
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ReplyDeleteMade me want to read faster and faster....^^^ (I don't know why my comment deleted it says this same thing)
ReplyDeleteSuspenseful
ReplyDeleteVery suspenseful and has an abrupt ending that makes you want to keep reading
ReplyDeleteSuspenseful
ReplyDelete2 spooki 4 me
ReplyDeleteGood story!
ReplyDeleteGreat story
ReplyDeleteGrand story
ReplyDeleteAnd then...? Then WHAT!? I should have put a disclaimer that anyone who left us hanging at the end had to write the sequel IMMEDIATELY so we know what happens next.
ReplyDeleteMaybe we should just make our own ending. How about this:
"My closet door randomly shut. I opened the door and turned the light on. I moved the clothes around and until I saw something closer to the back. It was like a little light tunnel. I put my hand into and then...
I pull out a huge Ma'am Murphy's pizza. Holding it is my two friends, Serena and Gabi.
'We're going to eat this on the way to see Beyoncé in concert!'
Count me in!"
Don't leave me hanging man!! I can't take the suspense!! I could feel the suspense all through the story. Awesome job
ReplyDeleteI hate reading stories that have cliff hangers. Don't leave me hanging.
ReplyDeleteNice story!!
ReplyDeleteVery good story dude!!
ReplyDeleteI love cliff hangers when it's at the end of chapter. However, they don't work for the ending of a small story. Nice imagery though
ReplyDeleteGreat story, nice cliff hangar at the end
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